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1
Fast Fashion
Alondra Rivera
West Coast University
English 140
Melissa Cueto
9/14/25
2
Have you ever bought a shirt, dress, or trouser that looked great, was super cheap and
trendy at first, but then ripped or faded after just one wash? That is the reality of fast fashion.
Fast fashion is all about trendy clothes made quickly and sold at a low price due to the way they
are produced. It is fun because you can stay in style without spending much, but it comes with
significant problems that most people do not think about. Not everyone is aware that the
mechanism behind cheap fashion is based on low-quality working conditions, excessive
consumption of natural resources, and waste that hurt the planet (Niinimäki, 2022). The clothes
might look innocent, but the cost behind the scenes is more expensive than the advertised price.
Fast fashion is a problem because it mistreats workers, it hurts the environment, and it makes us
buy things that we don’t need.
References
Niinimäki, K. (2022). Sustainable fashion in a circular economy. Bloomsbury Publishing.
**## Documentosinttulo5.pdf**
Feedback for Introduction
Add the title to the first line of page 2 of your document in addition to the title page.
Your hook still needs some work. Take another look at the video lesson on writing an
introduction and make sure that the next version of your hook is more refined. Here's
the link for the video lesson, starting from the section that goes over hooks:
https://youtu.be/-I-0Yz6hosc?t=83
The thesis is well-constructed, but it needs to list FOUR subtopics, not just three.
Remember that the paper will have 4 body paragraphs, each covering a different
reason why fast fashion is a bad idea, so you need 4 reasons.
This is a more minor style thing to clean up later, but avoid all personal pronouns in
formal writing. These include the following: I, me, my, mine, myself, you, your, yours,
yourself, we, us, our, ourselves. Personal pronouns are informal and therefore not
appropriate for academic writing. Scan for any of them when you finish writing
something and make sure to remove any you have.
The reference goes on a separate page, and remember to include a link for the
source.
Overall, strong work structuring this intro and creating flow from sentence to
sentence. Start with adding the subtopic to the thesis and revising the hook. Then
you can worry about the little personal pronoun issue and the minor APA fixes
For this assignment, you will revise your introduction from last week based on your
feedback AND you will add your first body paragraph. The two paragraphs should be
submitted as a single document.
Use the feedback you received on your outline and on the introduction to make any
necessary improvements for these two paragraphs. The following elements must be
included in your submission:
Introduction:
[https://youtu.be/-I-0Yz6hosc?t=83](https://youtu.be/-I-0Yz6hosc?t=83)
[https://youtu.be/-I-0Yz6hosc?t=83](https://youtu.be/-I-0Yz6hosc?t=83)
● Start your essay with a hook designed to quickly engage the reader.
● Introduce the larger controversy that you will be weighing in on.
● Provide any necessary background information to bring your reader up to
speed on what you have chosen to present as an argument. This will vary
depending on your topic and may include elements such as definitions,
statistics, a brief history on your topic, etc.
● Close your introduction with your thesis statement.
First body paragraph:
● Begin your body paragraph with a topic sentence that clearly introduces
the subtopic of the paragraph and advances the argument in your thesis
statement.
● Provide logical, relevant supporting points in support of your topic
sentence and elaborate on each supporting point.
● Use evidence from reliable, academic sources to support your argument,
but make sure your paragraph does not rely entirely on research. Also
argue using your own logic.
● When using information from your sources, paraphrase carefully rather
than quoting word for word.
This assignment must be submitted in APA style. Make sure to use APA format, cite
any outside sources within the text, and include any references that you used at the
end.
Type your work into the APA template: APA Template
Download APA Template
See the rubric for specific grading criteria.
Resource: Use the Grammarly tool to catch and correct mistakes in your writing
assignments.
Points: 50
Due Sunday, 11: 59 p.m. (Pacific time)
Rubric
ENGL_140_OL – Introduction and First Body Paragraph Rubric
Criteria Ratings Pts
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[https://guides.westcoastuniversity.edu/grammarly](https://guides.westcoastuniversity.edu/grammarly)
This criterion
is linked to a
Learning
Outcome
Content:
Introduction
20 to >17.8 ptsSophisticatedThe introduction begins with an
engaging "hook" that avoids clichés. It contains sufficient and
appropriate background information that builds up to a compelling,
clearly articulated thesis statement.
17.8 to >15.8 ptsHighly CompetentThe introduction begins with a
"hook" and contains appropriate background information and a clearly
articulated thesis statement, but the background information may need
further development, or the hook may need refining.
15.8 to >14.4 ptsFairly CompetentThe introduction suffers from one
or more of the following problems: – The "hook" is missing or unclear. –
The background information is insufficient. – The thesis statement is
present but too broad/simplistic or not clearly articulated.
14.4 to >0 ptsNot CompetentThe introduction is missing a thesis
statement or is otherwise highly underdeveloped.
20
pts
This criterion
is linked to a
Learning
Outcome
Content: First
Body
Paragraph
20 to >17.8 ptsSophisticatedThe paragraph begins with a topic
sentence that clearly introduces the subtopic and advances the
argument in the thesis. The writer provides logical, relevant,
well-organized points in support of the topic sentence, and elaborates
on each. He/she incorporates well-paraphrased evidence from reliable,
academic sources as well as clear, logical thinking to support the
subtopic.
17.8 to >15.8 ptsHighly CompetentThe paragraph begins with a topic
sentence that introduces the subtopic and advances the argument in
the thesis. The writer provides logical, relevant points in support of the
topic sentence and incorporates evidence from reliable sources to
support the argument, but the paragraph would benefit from a better
flow of ideas, more effective paraphrasing, or further elaboration of
supporting points.
15.8 to >14.4 ptsFairly CompetentThe paragraph begins with a topic
sentence that introduces the subtopic and advances the argument in
the thesis. The writer supports the topic sentence and incorporates
sources, but not all sources are reliable and supporting points are not
all relevant and/or well-articulated. The paragraph is underdeveloped.
14.4 to >0 ptsNot CompetentThe paragraph is either missing a clear
topic sentence that supports the thesis or fails to support the
mini-argument that the writer presents in the topic sentence.
20
pts
This criterion
is linked to a
Learning
Outcome
Language
and
Mechanics
7.5 to >6.68 ptsSophisticatedThe writer’s tone is confident,
engaging, and appropriate for the assignment and/or the intended
audience. The text demonstrates strong vocabulary skills, and the
writer expresses ideas concisely. The writer makes minimal (if any)
errors in grammar, spelling, and/or punctuation. There are no
fragments or run-on sentences.
6.68 to >5.93 ptsHighly CompetentThe writer’s tone is appropriate
and effective overall. The text demonstrates good use of vocabulary,
and the writer expresses ideas concisely and clearly most of the time.
The writer makes some errors in grammar, spelling, and/or
punctuation, but these errors do not significantly distract the reader
from the substance of the text. The paragraphs contain few (if any)
fragments and/or run-on sentences.
5.93 to >5.4 ptsFairly CompetentThe writer’s work suffers from one
or more of the following problems: – too informal, too personal, not
authoritative enough, etc. – numerous awkward sentence
constructions, wordiness, and/or limited vocabulary – numerous errors
in grammar, spelling, punctuation, and/or sentence structure, which at
times distract the reader from the substance of the text
5.4 to >0 ptsNot CompetentThe writer often fails to communicate
ideas effectively because the paragraphs suffer from significant
problems with language and/or mechanics, regularly distracting the
reader from the substance of the text and hindering comprehension.
7.5
pts
This criterion
is linked to a
Learning
Outcome
APA
Format/Credit
ing Sources
2.5 to >2.23 ptsSophisticatedThe writer makes minimal (if any) errors
in APA format, citations, or references.
2.23 to >1.98 ptsHighly CompetentThe writer makes some errors in
APA format, citations, or references.
1.98 to >1.8 ptsFairly CompetentThe writer makes numerous errors
in APA format, citations, or references.
1.8 to >0 ptsNot CompetentThe writer makes significant errors in
APA format, citations, or references.
2.5
pts
Total Points: 50
Outline of the essay
I. Introduction
A. Hook: Have you ever bought a shirt that looked great, was super cheap and
trendy at first, but then ripped or faded after just one wash? That’s fast fashion.
B. Background info: Fast fashion is all about trendy clothes made really fast and sold
for dirt cheap because of the way it’s being produced.
C. Background info: It’s fun because you can stay in style without spending much,
but it comes with big problems most people don’t think about.
D. Thesis statement: Fast fashion is a problem because it treats workers badly, it
hurts the environment, and it makes us buy way more than we need.
II. Body Paragraph 1
A. Topic sentence: One of the biggest issues with fast fashion is how workers are
treated.
B. Supporting point: Workers in other countries are often underpaid and overworked.
1. Detail: Many workers get paid almost nothing for very long hours.
2. Detail: Factories can be unsafe and unhealthy places to work.
C. Supporting point: Big brands focus more on profit than workers’ well-being.
1. Detail: Even when brands claim to be “ethical,” conditions rarely improve.
2. Detail: Workers’ rights are often ignored in favor of speed and low costs
D. Supporting point: The system keeps workers trapped in poor conditions.
1. Detail: People making the clothes have little power or protections.
2. Detail: Labor issues are often hidden from consumers.
III. Body Paragraph 2
A. Topic/transition sentence: Fast fashion also causes serious harm to the
environment.
B. Supporting point: Producing cheap clothes uses a lot of natural resources.
1. Detail: Making clothes takes huge amounts of water and energy.
2. Detail: Factories release pollution into the air and water.
C. Supporting point: Clothes are made cheaply and thrown away quickly.
1. Detail: Most clothing ends up in landfills after only a few wears.
2. Detail: Cheap fabrics don’t break down, which harms the environment.
D. Supporting point: Synthetic fabrics pollute oceans.
1. Detail: Tiny plastic fibers from polyester and other fabrics end up in water
systems.
2. Detail: These microplastics hurt wildlife and ecosystems.
IV. Body Paragraph 3
A. Topic/transition sentence: Fast fashion encourages overproducing and waste.
B. Supporting point: Constantly changing trends make people feel the need to buy
more.
1. Detail: New styles appear all the time, making old clothes feel outdated
which influences more people to keep up to date with the fashion and buy
more clothes that aren't even good quality.
2. Detail: People often replace barely-worn clothes with the latest trends.
C. Supporting point: This makes it harder for sustainable fashion to compete.
1. Detail: Thrift stores and ethical brands struggle against cheap fast fashion.
2. Detail: People get stuck in a cycle of buying cheap, low-quality items.
D. Supporting point: Overconsumption has long-term social and environmental
effects.
1. Detail: It leads to waste and clutter.
2. Detail: It reduces demand for better-quality, sustainable clothing.
V. Conclusion
A. Restatement of thesis: Fast fashion is harmful because how people are
overconsuming these products which are making the factories produce more where
they mistreats workers, damage the environment, and encourage overconsumption.
B. So what?: If we slow down, buy better-quality clothes, reuse items, and support
thrift or sustainable brands, we can help both people and the planet.
– Rubric
**## Documentosinttulo5.pdf**
Feedback for Introduction
Add the title to the first line of page 2 of your document in addition to the title page.
Your hook still needs some work. Take another look at the video lesson on writing an
introduction and make sure that the next version of your hook is more refined. Here's
the link for the video lesson, starting from the section that goes over hooks:
https://youtu.be/-I-0Yz6hosc?t=83
The thesis is well-constructed, but it needs to list FOUR subtopics, not just three.
Remember that the paper will have 4 body paragraphs, each covering a different
reason why fast fashion is a bad idea, so you need 4 reasons.
This is a more minor style thing to clean up later, but avoid all personal pronouns in
formal writing. These include the following: I, me, my, mine, myself, you, your, yours,
yourself, we, us, our, ourselves. Personal pronouns are informal and therefore not
appropriate for academic writing. Scan for any of them when you finish writing
something and make sure to remove any you have.
The reference goes on a separate page, and remember to include a link for the
source.
Overall, strong work structuring this intro and creating flow from sentence to
sentence. Start with adding the subtopic to the thesis and revising the hook. Then
you can worry about the little personal pronoun issue and the minor APA fixes
For this assignment, you will revise your introduction from last week based on your
feedback AND you will add your first body paragraph. The two paragraphs should be
submitted as a single document.
Use the feedback you received on your outline and on the introduction to make any
necessary improvements for these two paragraphs. The following elements must be
included in your submission:
Introduction:
[https://youtu.be/-I-0Yz6hosc?t=83](https://youtu.be/-I-0Yz6hosc?t=83)
[https://youtu.be/-I-0Yz6hosc?t=83](https://youtu.be/-I-0Yz6hosc?t=83)
● Start your essay with a hook designed to quickly engage the reader.
● Introduce the larger controversy that you will be weighing in on.
● Provide any necessary background information to bring your reader up to
speed on what you have chosen to present as an argument. This will vary
depending on your topic and may include elements such as definitions,
statistics, a brief history on your topic, etc.
● Close your introduction with your thesis statement.
First body paragraph:
● Begin your body paragraph with a topic sentence that clearly introduces
the subtopic of the paragraph and advances the argument in your thesis
statement.
● Provide logical, relevant supporting points in support of your topic
sentence and elaborate on each supporting point.
● Use evidence from reliable, academic sources to support your argument,
but make sure your paragraph does not rely entirely on research. Also
argue using your own logic.
● When using information from your sources, paraphrase carefully rather
than quoting word for word.
This assignment must be submitted in APA style. Make sure to use APA format, cite
any outside sources within the text, and include any references that you used at the
end.
Type your work into the APA template: APA Template
Download APA Template
See the rubric for specific grading criteria.
Resource: Use the Grammarly tool to catch and correct mistakes in your writing
assignments.
Points: 50
Due Sunday, 11: 59 p.m. (Pacific time)
Rubric
ENGL_140_OL – Introduction and First Body Paragraph Rubric
Criteria Ratings Pts
[https://canvas.westcoastuniversity.edu/courses/65707/files/28265670/download?wrap=1](https://canvas.westcoastuniversity.edu/courses/65707/files/28265670/download?wrap=1)
[https://canvas.westcoastuniversity.edu/courses/65707/files/28265670/download?download_frd=1](https://canvas.westcoastuniversity.edu/courses/65707/files/28265670/download?download_frd=1)
[https://canvas.westcoastuniversity.edu/courses/65707/files/28265670/download?download_frd=1](https://canvas.westcoastuniversity.edu/courses/65707/files/28265670/download?download_frd=1)
[https://guides.westcoastuniversity.edu/grammarly](https://guides.westcoastuniversity.edu/grammarly)
This criterion
is linked to a
Learning
Outcome
Content:
Introduction
20 to >17.8 ptsSophisticatedThe introduction begins with an
engaging "hook" that avoids clichés. It contains sufficient and
appropriate background information that builds up to a compelling,
clearly articulated thesis statement.
17.8 to >15.8 ptsHighly CompetentThe introduction begins with a
"hook" and contains appropriate background information and a clearly
articulated thesis statement, but the background information may need
further development, or the hook may need refining.
15.8 to >14.4 ptsFairly CompetentThe introduction suffers from one
or more of the following problems: – The "hook" is missing or unclear. –
The background information is insufficient. – The thesis statement is
present but too broad/simplistic or not clearly articulated.
14.4 to >0 ptsNot CompetentThe introduction is missing a thesis
statement or is otherwise highly underdeveloped.
20
pts
This criterion
is linked to a
Learning
Outcome
Content: First
Body
Paragraph
20 to >17.8 ptsSophisticatedThe paragraph begins with a topic
sentence that clearly introduces the subtopic and advances the
argument in the thesis. The writer provides logical, relevant,
well-organized points in support of the topic sentence, and elaborates
on each. He/she incorporates well-paraphrased evidence from reliable,
academic sources as well as clear, logical thinking to support the
subtopic.
17.8 to >15.8 ptsHighly CompetentThe paragraph begins with a topic
sentence that introduces the subtopic and advances the argument in
the thesis. The writer provides logical, relevant points in support of the
topic sentence and incorporates evidence from reliable sources to
support the argument, but the paragraph would benefit from a better
flow of ideas, more effective paraphrasing, or further elaboration of
supporting points.
15.8 to >14.4 ptsFairly CompetentThe paragraph begins with a topic
sentence that introduces the subtopic and advances the argument in
the thesis. The writer supports the topic sentence and incorporates
sources, but not all sources are reliable and supporting points are not
all relevant and/or well-articulated. The paragraph is underdeveloped.
14.4 to >0 ptsNot CompetentThe paragraph is either missing a clear
topic sentence that supports the thesis or fails to support the
mini-argument that the writer presents in the topic sentence.
20
pts
This criterion
is linked to a
Learning
Outcome
Language
and
Mechanics
7.5 to >6.68 ptsSophisticatedThe writer’s tone is confident,
engaging, and appropriate for the assignment and/or the intended
audience. The text demonstrates strong vocabulary skills, and the
writer expresses ideas concisely. The writer makes minimal (if any)
errors in grammar, spelling, and/or punctuation. There are no
fragments or run-on sentences.
6.68 to >5.93 ptsHighly CompetentThe writer’s tone is appropriate
and effective overall. The text demonstrates good use of vocabulary,
and the writer expresses ideas concisely and clearly most of the time.
The writer makes some errors in grammar, spelling, and/or
punctuation, but these errors do not significantly distract the reader
from the substance of the text. The paragraphs contain few (if any)
fragments and/or run-on sentences.
5.93 to >5.4 ptsFairly CompetentThe writer’s work suffers from one
or more of the following problems: – too informal, too personal, not
authoritative enough, etc. – numerous awkward sentence
constructions, wordiness, and/or limited vocabulary – numerous errors
in grammar, spelling, punctuation, and/or sentence structure, which at
times distract the reader from the substance of the text
5.4 to >0 ptsNot CompetentThe writer often fails to communicate
ideas effectively because the paragraphs suffer from significant
problems with language and/or mechanics, regularly distracting the
reader from the substance of the text and hindering comprehension.
7.5
pts
This criterion
is linked to a
Learning
Outcome
APA
Format/Credit
ing Sources
2.5 to >2.23 ptsSophisticatedThe writer makes minimal (if any) errors
in APA format, citations, or references.
2.23 to >1.98 ptsHighly CompetentThe writer makes some errors in
APA format, citations, or references.
1.98 to >1.8 ptsFairly CompetentThe writer makes numerous errors
in APA format, citations, or references.
1.8 to >0 ptsNot CompetentThe writer makes significant errors in
APA format, citations, or references.
2.5
pts
Total Points: 50
Outline of the essay
I. Introduction
A. Hook: Have you ever bought a shirt that looked great, was super cheap and
trendy at first, but then ripped or faded after just one wash? That’s fast fashion.
B. Background info: Fast fashion is all about trendy clothes made really fast and sold
for dirt cheap because of the way it’s being produced.
C. Background info: It’s fun because you can stay in style without spending much,
but it comes with big problems most people don’t think about.
D. Thesis statement: Fast fashion is a problem because it treats workers badly, it
hurts the environment, and it makes us buy way more than we need.
II. Body Paragraph 1
A. Topic sentence: One of the biggest issues with fast fashion is how workers are
treated.
B. Supporting point: Workers in other countries are often underpaid and overworked.
1. Detail: Many workers get paid almost nothing for very long hours.
2. Detail: Factories can be unsafe and unhealthy places to work.
C. Supporting point: Big brands focus more on profit than workers’ well-being.
1. Detail: Even when brands claim to be “ethical,” conditions rarely improve.
2. Detail: Workers’ rights are often ignored in favor of speed and low costs
D. Supporting point: The system keeps workers trapped in poor conditions.
1. Detail: People making the clothes have little power or protections.
2. Detail: Labor issues are often hidden from consumers.
III. Body Paragraph 2
A. Topic/transition sentence: Fast fashion also causes serious harm to the
environment.
B. Supporting point: Producing cheap clothes uses a lot of natural resources.
1. Detail: Making clothes takes huge amounts of water and energy.
2. Detail: Factories release pollution into the air and water.
C. Supporting point: Clothes are made cheaply and thrown away quickly.
1. Detail: Most clothing ends up in landfills after only a few wears.
2. Detail: Cheap fabrics don’t break down, which harms the environment.
D. Supporting point: Synthetic fabrics pollute oceans.
1. Detail: Tiny plastic fibers from polyester and other fabrics end up in water
systems.
2. Detail: These microplastics hurt wildlife and ecosystems.
IV. Body Paragraph 3
A. Topic/transition sentence: Fast fashion encourages overproducing and waste.
B. Supporting point: Constantly changing trends make people feel the need to buy
more.
1. Detail: New styles appear all the time, making old clothes feel outdated
which influences more people to keep up to date with the fashion and buy
more clothes that aren't even good quality.
2. Detail: People often replace barely-worn clothes with the latest trends.
C. Supporting point: This makes it harder for sustainable fashion to compete.
1. Detail: Thrift stores and ethical brands struggle against cheap fast fashion.
2. Detail: People get stuck in a cycle of buying cheap, low-quality items.
D. Supporting point: Overconsumption has long-term social and environmental
effects.
1. Detail: It leads to waste and clutter.
2. Detail: It reduces demand for better-quality, sustainable clothing.
V. Conclusion
A. Restatement of thesis: Fast fashion is harmful because how people are
overconsuming these products which are making the factories produce more where
they mistreats workers, damage the environment, and encourage overconsumption.
B. So what?: If we slow down, buy better-quality clothes, reuse items, and support
thrift or sustainable brands, we can help both people and the planet.
– Rubric
**## 22H5690122660002UIntroductionParagraph22.pdf**
1
Fast Fashion
Alondra Rivera
West Coast University
English 140
Melissa Cueto
9/14/25
2
Have you ever bought a shirt, dress, or trouser that looked great, was super cheap and
trendy at first, but then ripped or faded after just one wash? That is the reality of fast fashion.
Fast fashion is all about trendy clothes made quickly and sold at a low price due to the way they
are produced. It is fun because you can stay in style without spending much, but it comes with
significant problems that most people do not think about. Not everyone is aware that the
mechanism behind cheap fashion is based on low-quality working conditions, excessive
consumption of natural resources, and waste that hurt the planet (Niinimäki, 2022). The clothes
might look innocent, but the cost behind the scenes is more expensive than the advertised price.
Fast fashion is a problem because it mistreats workers, it hurts the environment, and it makes us
buy things that we don’t need.
References
Niinimäki, K. (2022). Sustainable fashion in a circular economy. Bloomsbury Publishing.
**## Documentosinttulo5.pdf**
Feedback for Introduction
Add the title to the first line of page 2 of your document in addition to the title page.
Your hook still needs some work. Take another look at the video lesson on writing an
introduction and make sure that the next version of your hook is more refined. Here's
the link for the video lesson, starting from the section that goes over hooks:
https://youtu.be/-I-0Yz6hosc?t=83
The thesis is well-constructed, but it needs to list FOUR subtopics, not just three.
Remember that the paper will have 4 body paragraphs, each covering a different
reason why fast fashion is a bad idea, so you need 4 reasons.
This is a more minor style thing to clean up later, but avoid all personal pronouns in
formal writing. These include the following: I, me, my, mine, myself, you, your, yours,
yourself, we, us, our, ourselves. Personal pronouns are informal and therefore not
appropriate for academic writing. Scan for any of them when you finish writing
something and make sure to remove any you have.
The reference goes on a separate page, and remember to include a link for the
source.
Overall, strong work structuring this intro and creating flow from sentence to
sentence. Start with adding the subtopic to the thesis and revising the hook. Then
you can worry about the little personal pronoun issue and the minor APA fixes
For this assignment, you will revise your introduction from last week based on your
feedback AND you will add your first body paragraph. The two paragraphs should be
submitted as a single document.
Use the feedback you received on your outline and on the introduction to make any
necessary improvements for these two paragraphs. The following elements must be
included in your submission:
Introduction:
[https://youtu.be/-I-0Yz6hosc?t=83](https://youtu.be/-I-0Yz6hosc?t=83)
[https://youtu.be/-I-0Yz6hosc?t=83](https://youtu.be/-I-0Yz6hosc?t=83)
● Start your essay with a hook designed to quickly engage the reader.
● Introduce the larger controversy that you will be weighing in on.
● Provide any necessary background information to bring your reader up to
speed on what you have chosen to present as an argument. This will vary
depending on your topic and may include elements such as definitions,
statistics, a brief history on your topic, etc.
● Close your introduction with your thesis statement.
First body paragraph:
● Begin your body paragraph with a topic sentence that clearly introduces
the subtopic of the paragraph and advances the argument in your thesis
statement.
● Provide logical, relevant supporting points in support of your topic
sentence and elaborate on each supporting point.
● Use evidence from reliable, academic sources to support your argument,
but make sure your paragraph does not rely entirely on research. Also
argue using your own logic.
● When using information from your sources, paraphrase carefully rather
than quoting word for word.
This assignment must be submitted in APA style. Make sure to use APA format, cite
any outside sources within the text, and include any references that you used at the
end.
Type your work into the APA template: APA Template
Download APA Template
See the rubric for specific grading criteria.
Resource: Use the Grammarly tool to catch and correct mistakes in your writing
assignments.
Points: 50
Due Sunday, 11: 59 p.m. (Pacific time)
Rubric
ENGL_140_OL – Introduction and First Body Paragraph Rubric
Criteria Ratings Pts
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This criterion
is linked to a
Learning
Outcome
Content:
Introduction
20 to >17.8 ptsSophisticatedThe introduction begins with an
engaging "hook" that avoids clichés. It contains sufficient and
appropriate background information that builds up to a compelling,
clearly articulated thesis statement.
17.8 to >15.8 ptsHighly CompetentThe introduction begins with a
"hook" and contains appropriate background information and a clearly
articulated thesis statement, but the background information may need
further development, or the hook may need refining.
15.8 to >14.4 ptsFairly CompetentThe introduction suffers from one
or more of the following problems: – The "hook" is missing or unclear. –
The background information is insufficient. – The thesis statement is
present but too broad/simplistic or not clearly articulated.
14.4 to >0 ptsNot CompetentThe introduction is missing a thesis
statement or is otherwise highly underdeveloped.
20
pts
This criterion
is linked to a
Learning
Outcome
Content: First
Body
Paragraph
20 to >17.8 ptsSophisticatedThe paragraph begins with a topic
sentence that clearly introduces the subtopic and advances the
argument in the thesis. The writer provides logical, relevant,
well-organized points in support of the topic sentence, and elaborates
on each. He/she incorporates well-paraphrased evidence from reliable,
academic sources as well as clear, logical thinking to support the
subtopic.
17.8 to >15.8 ptsHighly CompetentThe paragraph begins with a topic
sentence that introduces the subtopic and advances the argument in
the thesis. The writer provides logical, relevant points in support of the
topic sentence and incorporates evidence from reliable sources to
support the argument, but the paragraph would benefit from a better
flow of ideas, more effective paraphrasing, or further elaboration of
supporting points.
15.8 to >14.4 ptsFairly CompetentThe paragraph begins with a topic
sentence that introduces the subtopic and advances the argument in
the thesis. The writer supports the topic sentence and incorporates
sources, but not all sources are reliable and supporting points are not
all relevant and/or well-articulated. The paragraph is underdeveloped.
14.4 to >0 ptsNot CompetentThe paragraph is either missing a clear
topic sentence that supports the thesis or fails to support the
mini-argument that the writer presents in the topic sentence.
20
pts
This criterion
is linked to a
Learning
Outcome
Language
and
Mechanics
7.5 to >6.68 ptsSophisticatedThe writer’s tone is confident,
engaging, and appropriate for the assignment and/or the intended
audience. The text demonstrates strong vocabulary skills, and the
writer expresses ideas concisely. The writer makes minimal (if any)
errors in grammar, spelling, and/or punctuation. There are no
fragments or run-on sentences.
6.68 to >5.93 ptsHighly CompetentThe writer’s tone is appropriate
and effective overall. The text demonstrates good use of vocabulary,
and the writer expresses ideas concisely and clearly most of the time.
The writer makes some errors in grammar, spelling, and/or
punctuation, but these errors do not significantly distract the reader
from the substance of the text. The paragraphs contain few (if any)
fragments and/or run-on sentences.
5.93 to >5.4 ptsFairly CompetentThe writer’s work suffers from one
or more of the following problems: – too informal, too personal, not
authoritative enough, etc. – numerous awkward sentence
constructions, wordiness, and/or limited vocabulary – numerous errors
in grammar, spelling, punctuation, and/or sentence structure, which at
times distract the reader from the substance of the text
5.4 to >0 ptsNot CompetentThe writer often fails to communicate
ideas effectively because the paragraphs suffer from significant
problems with language and/or mechanics, regularly distracting the
reader from the substance of the text and hindering comprehension.
7.5
pts
This criterion
is linked to a
Learning
Outcome
APA
Format/Credit
ing Sources
2.5 to >2.23 ptsSophisticatedThe writer makes minimal (if any) errors
in APA format, citations, or references.
2.23 to >1.98 ptsHighly CompetentThe writer makes some errors in
APA format, citations, or references.
1.98 to >1.8 ptsFairly CompetentThe writer makes numerous errors
in APA format, citations, or references.
1.8 to >0 ptsNot CompetentThe writer makes significant errors in
APA format, citations, or references.
2.5
pts
Total Points: 50
Outline of the essay
I. Introduction
A. Hook: Have you ever bought a shirt that looked great, was super cheap and
trendy at first, but then ripped or faded after just one wash? That’s fast fashion.
B. Background info: Fast fashion is all about trendy clothes made really fast and sold
for dirt cheap because of the way it’s being produced.
C. Background info: It’s fun because you can stay in style without spending much,
but it comes with big problems most people don’t think about.
D. Thesis statement: Fast fashion is a problem because it treats workers badly, it
hurts the environment, and it makes us buy way more than we need.
II. Body Paragraph 1
A. Topic sentence: One of the biggest issues with fast fashion is how workers are
treated.
B. Supporting point: Workers in other countries are often underpaid and overworked.
1. Detail: Many workers get paid almost nothing for very long hours.
2. Detail: Factories can be unsafe and unhealthy places to work.
C. Supporting point: Big brands focus more on profit than workers’ well-being.
1. Detail: Even when brands claim to be “ethical,” conditions rarely improve.
2. Detail: Workers’ rights are often ignored in favor of speed and low costs
D. Supporting point: The system keeps workers trapped in poor conditions.
1. Detail: People making the clothes have little power or protections.
2. Detail: Labor issues are often hidden from consumers.
III. Body Paragraph 2
A. Topic/transition sentence: Fast fashion also causes serious harm to the
environment.
B. Supporting point: Producing cheap clothes uses a lot of natural resources.
1. Detail: Making clothes takes huge amounts of water and energy.
2. Detail: Factories release pollution into the air and water.
C. Supporting point: Clothes are made cheaply and thrown away quickly.
1. Detail: Most clothing ends up in landfills after only a few wears.
2. Detail: Cheap fabrics don’t break down, which harms the environment.
D. Supporting point: Synthetic fabrics pollute oceans.
1. Detail: Tiny plastic fibers from polyester and other fabrics end up in water
systems.
2. Detail: These microplastics hurt wildlife and ecosystems.
IV. Body Paragraph 3
A. Topic/transition sentence: Fast fashion encourages overproducing and waste.
B. Supporting point: Constantly changing trends make people feel the need to buy
more.
1. Detail: New styles appear all the time, making old clothes feel outdated
which influences more people to keep up to date with the fashion and buy
more clothes that aren't even good quality.
2. Detail: People often replace barely-worn clothes with the latest trends.
C. Supporting point: This makes it harder for sustainable fashion to compete.
1. Detail: Thrift stores and ethical brands struggle against cheap fast fashion.
2. Detail: People get stuck in a cycle of buying cheap, low-quality items.
D. Supporting point: Overconsumption has long-term social and environmental
effects.
1. Detail: It leads to waste and clutter.
2. Detail: It reduces demand for better-quality, sustainable clothing.
V. Conclusion
A. Restatement of thesis: Fast fashion is harmful because how people are
overconsuming these products which are making the factories produce more where
they mistreats workers, damage the environment, and encourage overconsumption.
B. So what?: If we slow down, buy better-quality clothes, reuse items, and support
thrift or sustainable brands, we can help both people and the planet.
– Rubric
**## 22H5690122660002UIntroductionParagraph22.pdf**
1
Fast Fashion
Alondra Rivera
West Coast University
English 140
Melissa Cueto
9/14/25
2
Have you ever bought a shirt, dress, or trouser that looked great, was super cheap and
trendy at first, but then ripped or faded after just one wash? That is the reality of fast fashion.
Fast fashion is all about trendy clothes made quickly and sold at a low price due to the way they
are produced. It is fun because you can stay in style without spending much, but it comes with
significant problems that most people do not think about. Not everyone is aware that the
mechanism behind cheap fashion is based on low-quality working conditions, excessive
consumption of natural resources, and waste that hurt the planet (Niinimäki, 2022). The clothes
might look innocent, but the cost behind the scenes is more expensive than the advertised price.
Fast fashion is a problem because it mistreats workers, it hurts the environment, and it makes us
buy things that we don’t need.
References
Niinimäki, K. (2022). Sustainable fashion in a circular economy. Bloomsbury Publishing.
**## Documentosinttulo5.pdf**
Feedback for Introduction
Add the title to the first line of page 2 of your document in addition to the title page.
Your hook still needs some work. Take another look at the video lesson on writing an
introduction and make sure that the next version of your hook is more refined. Here's
the link for the video lesson, starting from the section that goes over hooks:
https://youtu.be/-I-0Yz6hosc?t=83
The thesis is well-constructed, but it needs to list FOUR subtopics, not just three.
Remember that the paper will have 4 body paragraphs, each covering a different
reason why fast fashion is a bad idea, so you need 4 reasons.
This is a more minor style thing to clean up later, but avoid all personal pronouns in
formal writing. These include the following: I, me, my, mine, myself, you, your, yours,
yourself, we, us, our, ourselves. Personal pronouns are informal and therefore not
appropriate for academic writing. Scan for any of them when you finish writing
something and make sure to remove any you have.
The reference goes on a separate page, and remember to include a link for the
source.
Overall, strong work structuring this intro and creating flow from sentence to
sentence. Start with adding the subtopic to the thesis and revising the hook. Then
you can worry about the little personal pronoun issue and the minor APA fixes
For this assignment, you will revise your introduction from last week based on your
feedback AND you will add your first body paragraph. The two paragraphs should be
submitted as a single document.
Use the feedback you received on your outline and on the introduction to make any
necessary improvements for these two paragraphs. The following elements must be
included in your submission:
Introduction:
[https://youtu.be/-I-0Yz6hosc?t=83](https://youtu.be/-I-0Yz6hosc?t=83)
[https://youtu.be/-I-0Yz6hosc?t=83](https://youtu.be/-I-0Yz6hosc?t=83)
● Start your essay with a hook designed to quickly engage the reader.
● Introduce the larger controversy that you will be weighing in on.
● Provide any necessary background information to bring your reader up to
speed on what you have chosen to present as an argument. This will vary
depending on your topic and may include elements such as definitions,
statistics, a brief history on your topic, etc.
● Close your introduction with your thesis statement.
First body paragraph:
● Begin your body paragraph with a topic sentence that clearly introduces
the subtopic of the paragraph and advances the argument in your thesis
statement.
● Provide logical, relevant supporting points in support of your topic
sentence and elaborate on each supporting point.
● Use evidence from reliable, academic sources to support your argument,
but make sure your paragraph does not rely entirely on research. Also
argue using your own logic.
● When using information from your sources, paraphrase carefully rather
than quoting word for word.
This assignment must be submitted in APA style. Make sure to use APA format, cite
any outside sources within the text, and include any references that you used at the
end.
Type your work into the APA template: APA Template
Download APA Template
See the rubric for specific grading criteria.
Resource: Use the Grammarly tool to catch and correct mistakes in your writing
assignments.
Points: 50
Due Sunday, 11: 59 p.m. (Pacific time)
Rubric
ENGL_140_OL – Introduction and First Body Paragraph Rubric
Criteria Ratings Pts
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This criterion
is linked to a
Learning
Outcome
Content:
Introduction
20 to >17.8 ptsSophisticatedThe introduction begins with an
engaging "hook" that avoids clichés. It contains sufficient and
appropriate background information that builds up to a compelling,
clearly articulated thesis statement.
17.8 to >15.8 ptsHighly CompetentThe introduction begins with a
"hook" and contains appropriate background information and a clearly
articulated thesis statement, but the background information may need
further development, or the hook may need refining.
15.8 to >14.4 ptsFairly CompetentThe introduction suffers from one
or more of the following problems: – The "hook" is missing or unclear. –
The background information is insufficient. – The thesis statement is
present but too broad/simplistic or not clearly articulated.
14.4 to >0 ptsNot CompetentThe introduction is missing a thesis
statement or is otherwise highly underdeveloped.
20
pts
This criterion
is linked to a
Learning
Outcome
Content: First
Body
Paragraph
20 to >17.8 ptsSophisticatedThe paragraph begins with a topic
sentence that clearly introduces the subtopic and advances the
argument in the thesis. The writer provides logical, relevant,
well-organized points in support of the topic sentence, and elaborates
on each. He/she incorporates well-paraphrased evidence from reliable,
academic sources as well as clear, logical thinking to support the
subtopic.
17.8 to >15.8 ptsHighly CompetentThe paragraph begins with a topic
sentence that introduces the subtopic and advances the argument in
the thesis. The writer provides logical, relevant points in support of the
topic sentence and incorporates evidence from reliable sources to
support the argument, but the paragraph would benefit from a better
flow of ideas, more effective paraphrasing, or further elaboration of
supporting points.
15.8 to >14.4 ptsFairly CompetentThe paragraph begins with a topic
sentence that introduces the subtopic and advances the argument in
the thesis. The writer supports the topic sentence and incorporates
sources, but not all sources are reliable and supporting points are not
all relevant and/or well-articulated. The paragraph is underdeveloped.
14.4 to >0 ptsNot CompetentThe paragraph is either missing a clear
topic sentence that supports the thesis or fails to support the
mini-argument that the writer presents in the topic sentence.
20
pts
This criterion
is linked to a
Learning
Outcome
Language
and
Mechanics
7.5 to >6.68 ptsSophisticatedThe writer’s tone is confident,
engaging, and appropriate for the assignment and/or the intended
audience. The text demonstrates strong vocabulary skills, and the
writer expresses ideas concisely. The writer makes minimal (if any)
errors in grammar, spelling, and/or punctuation. There are no
fragments or run-on sentences.
6.68 to >5.93 ptsHighly CompetentThe writer’s tone is appropriate
and effective overall. The text demonstrates good use of vocabulary,
and the writer expresses ideas concisely and clearly most of the time.
The writer makes some errors in grammar, spelling, and/or
punctuation, but these errors do not significantly distract the reader
from the substance of the text. The paragraphs contain few (if any)
fragments and/or run-on sentences.
5.93 to >5.4 ptsFairly CompetentThe writer’s work suffers from one
or more of the following problems: – too informal, too personal, not
authoritative enough, etc. – numerous awkward sentence
constructions, wordiness, and/or limited vocabulary – numerous errors
in grammar, spelling, punctuation, and/or sentence structure, which at
times distract the reader from the substance of the text
5.4 to >0 ptsNot CompetentThe writer often fails to communicate
ideas effectively because the paragraphs suffer from significant
problems with language and/or mechanics, regularly distracting the
reader from the substance of the text and hindering comprehension.
7.5
pts
This criterion
is linked to a
Learning
Outcome
APA
Format/Credit
ing Sources
2.5 to >2.23 ptsSophisticatedThe writer makes minimal (if any) errors
in APA format, citations, or references.
2.23 to >1.98 ptsHighly CompetentThe writer makes some errors in
APA format, citations, or references.
1.98 to >1.8 ptsFairly CompetentThe writer makes numerous errors
in APA format, citations, or references.
1.8 to >0 ptsNot CompetentThe writer makes significant errors in
APA format, citations, or references.
2.5
pts
Total Points: 50
Outline of the essay
I. Introduction
A. Hook: Have you ever bought a shirt that looked great, was super cheap and
trendy at first, but then ripped or faded after just one wash? That’s fast fashion.
B. Background info: Fast fashion is all about trendy clothes made really fast and sold
for dirt cheap because of the way it’s being produced.
C. Background info: It’s fun because you can stay in style without spending much,
but it comes with big problems most people don’t think about.
D. Thesis statement: Fast fashion is a problem because it treats workers badly, it
hurts the environment, and it makes us buy way more than we need.
II. Body Paragraph 1
A. Topic sentence: One of the biggest issues with fast fashion is how workers are
treated.
B. Supporting point: Workers in other countries are often underpaid and overworked.
1. Detail: Many workers get paid almost nothing for very long hours.
2. Detail: Factories can be unsafe and unhealthy places to work.
C. Supporting point: Big brands focus more on profit than workers’ well-being.
1. Detail: Even when brands claim to be “ethical,” conditions rarely improve.
2. Detail: Workers’ rights are often ignored in favor of speed and low costs
D. Supporting point: The system keeps workers trapped in poor conditions.
1. Detail: People making the clothes have little power or protections.
2. Detail: Labor issues are often hidden from consumers.
III. Body Paragraph 2
A. Topic/transition sentence: Fast fashion also causes serious harm to the
environment.
B. Supporting point: Producing cheap clothes uses a lot of natural resources.
1. Detail: Making clothes takes huge amounts of water and energy.
2. Detail: Factories release pollution into the air and water.
C. Supporting point: Clothes are made cheaply and thrown away quickly.
1. Detail: Most clothing ends up in landfills after only a few wears.
2. Detail: Cheap fabrics don’t break down, which harms the environment.
D. Supporting point: Synthetic fabrics pollute oceans.
1. Detail: Tiny plastic fibers from polyester and other fabrics end up in water
systems.
2. Detail: These microplastics hurt wildlife and ecosystems.
IV. Body Paragraph 3
A. Topic/transition sentence: Fast fashion encourages overproducing and waste.
B. Supporting point: Constantly changing trends make people feel the need to buy
more.
1. Detail: New styles appear all the time, making old clothes feel outdated
which influences more people to keep up to date with the fashion and buy
more clothes that aren't even good quality.
2. Detail: People often replace barely-worn clothes with the latest trends.
C. Supporting point: This makes it harder for sustainable fashion to compete.
1. Detail: Thrift stores and ethical brands struggle against cheap fast fashion.
2. Detail: People get stuck in a cycle of buying cheap, low-quality items.
D. Supporting point: Overconsumption has long-term social and environmental
effects.
1. Detail: It leads to waste and clutter.
2. Detail: It reduces demand for better-quality, sustainable clothing.
V. Conclusion
A. Restatement of thesis: Fast fashion is harmful because how people are
overconsuming these products which are making the factories produce more where
they mistreats workers, damage the environment, and encourage overconsumption.
B. So what?: If we slow down, buy better-quality clothes, reuse items, and support
thrift or sustainable brands, we can help both people and the planet.
– Rubric
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