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WRITING THESIS STATEMENTS
Upon successful completion of this lesson, you should be able to:
• distinguish an arguable thesis from a statement of fact
• write an arguable thesis statement
• write a thesis statement and supporting arguments that logically align
• revise a thesis statement so that it aligns with existing supporting arguments
PART 1: ARGUABLE THESES VERSUS STATEMENTS OF FACT
In Parts 2 and 3 of this lesson, you will explore two different approaches you can use to
write a thesis statement. First, however, you must understand the difference between an
arguable thesis and a statement of fact.
Your readers—especially your professors—want to read writing that engages them.
Consequently, you must write thesis statements that are arguable, not factual.
A statement of fact is a statement that cannot be argued—at least not logically. Students
often write statements of fact instead of arguable theses when they are struggling to
embrace a topic. Statements of fact seem easy to write about because, well, they are easy
to prove. After all, they’re facts. The problem is that most students cannot write engaging
papers around statements of fact. Such theses prevent students from demonstrating
critical thinking ability and analytical skills, which professors want to see.
Statements of fact are statements of common knowledge; therefore, writing papers about
them prevents students from demonstrating important academic abilities. Consider the
statements below.
Smoking can cause health problems.
Small cars get better fuel mileage than 4×4 pickup trucks.
On average, people with college degrees earn more money in the workplace.
Foul language is common in movies.
If you were to write a paper around any of the above statements, your writing would
probably be quite dull because you would be restating facts that the general public
already knows.
In order to make your writing interesting and engaging, you should develop thesis
statements that are arguable. Sometimes you will be writing to persuade others to see
things your way. Other times you will simply be making an opinionated statement and
laying out your case. Whatever the occasion, your thesis statement should state your
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position on a debatable issue. In other words, when you write a thesis statement, you take
a stand about something.
Suppose one of the general topics listed on the previous page interests you. You could
still write about it—you might just have to change your approach so that your thesis
statement is arguable. Consider:
Statement of fact: Smoking can cause health problems.
Arguable thesis statement: The government should ban smoking altogether.
Statement of fact: Small cars get better fuel mileage than 4×4 pickup trucks.
Arguable thesis statement: The government should ban 4×4 pickup trucks except for
work-related use.
Statement of fact: On average, people with college degrees earn more money in the
workplace.
Arguable thesis statement: A college degree should not be required for the _____
profession.
Statement of fact: Foul language is common in movies.
Arguable thesis statement: The amount of foul language in movies is disproportionate to
the amount of foul language in real life.
Any given individual might agree or disagree with some or all of the revised statements
above, and the evidence used to support or challenge the statements would be different
from writer to writer. The point is that a writer who supported or challenged one of these
theses would have to think in order to make his or her case. With a statement of fact, a
writer simply puts on paper what has already been established by other people. An
arguable thesis, on the other hand, requires a writer to think about which supporting
arguments best challenge the other side of the issue. It is this type of thinking that
resonates with your professors.
Exercise 1
The following exercise contains hypothetical thesis statements. On the blank line beside
each statement, write “A” if the statement is arguable or “F” if the statement is a
statement of fact.
_______1. The amount of financial aid available to students should be proportionate to
the earning potential of the career fields for which their majors prepare them.
_______2. Tom Hanks should have won the Best-Actor award for his performance in
Castaway.
_______3. Frank Sinatra was loved and admired by many people.
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_______4. The United States contains citizens of many different ethnicities.
_______5. Sterling College should make coffee available to students in every building.
_______6. Driving under the influence of alcohol is dangerous.
_______7. Penalties for drinking and driving should be more severe.
_______8. Television networks air a lot of reality shows nowadays.
_______9. The Harry Potter movies are better than the Indiana Jones movies.
_______10. Steroid abuse can lead to serious health problems.
Exercise 2
Write three (3) to five (5) arguable thesis statements.
PART 2: WRITING AN ARGUABLE AND NARROW THESIS STATEMENT
AROUND AN ISSUE THAT EXCITES YOU
Because you’re a living, breathing human being, you have strong feelings about some
things. Maybe you’ve played a sport all of your life, had many good experiences within
that sport, and consequently care deeply about it. Or perhaps you’ve lost a loved one to a
rare disease and feel strongly that public awareness about that disease should increase.
Because God gave us emotions, we care about things.
Often, especially in writing courses, students are told to “write about what they know.”
When assignments are relatively open ended and students are permitted to write thesis
statements that are not merely restatements of essay questions, their knowledge and
passion about topics close to their heart can enhance their writing. However, some
students have a difficult time developing a good thesis statement from a general topic or
issue, even if they care a great deal about the subject.
Consider, for example, a student who is asked to write a paper about anything having to
do with communication. The student is attending college on a baseball scholarship, and
he would love to connect baseball to the subject of communication so that he does not die
of boredom while working on the assignment. However, the only association he can
make between the two subjects has to do with the non-verbal signals that coaches give to
their players. On the day his thesis is due, the student submits the following sentence to
his instructor:
Hand signals are an important part of baseball.
Perhaps the instructor should use more tact, but in the margin beside the student’s thesis
statement, she writes, “No duh! This is a statement of fact. Try again.”
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When the instructor returns the paper a couple of days later, she sits down with the
student and helps him think through the assignment. After helping him see why his
current thesis is a statement of fact, she then helps him brainstorm some ideas. She begins
by having him write “communication and baseball” in a circle on a blank sheet of paper.
Then, sensitive to the student’s desire to connect the assignment topic to his favorite
sport, she asks, “What other types of communication are associated with baseball?”
The student thinks for a moment—but not too long, for he knows baseball well.
“Catchers flash signals to pitchers so they can agree on what type of pitch will be
thrown.”
“Okay,” replies the instructor. “Write ‘catchers’ signals’ in a circle and connect it to the
first.”
Catchers’
signals
Communication
and baseball
“What else?” asks the instructor.
“Well, infielders sometimes communicate with each other with secret hand signals.”
“Okay” says the instructor. “Write that in another circle. But you’re still thinking about
the players. How else does communication relate to baseball?”
“Announcers communicate,” says the student.
“Now you’re thinking. Write that down, too.”
Communication
and baseball
Announcers
Infielders’
signals Catchers’
signals
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After a few moments of silence, the student says, “I’m thinking of something that has a
definite connection to communication but only a lose connection to baseball.”
”That’s okay,” the instructor replies. “We’re brainstorming. And remember: the
assignment topic is communication—not baseball. You’re thinking about baseball
because you want to make the assignment interesting for yourself. What’s your idea?”
“Earlier in the summer I saw a commercial for a piece of equipment that I thought would
help make me a better player. I saved my money and bought it, but it was the biggest rip-
off I’ve ever seen. The commercial was completely misleading. I was thinking of writing
‘baseball product advertising’ in another circle.”
“Now you’re really thinking,” says the instructor.
The student is not even finished writing the words when he has an even more developed
idea. “You know, since I bought that piece of equipment, I’ve often wondered about how
many people are misled by false advertising.”
The instructor grins, sensing that the student is getting closer to a good thesis statement.
“I mean, false advertising obviously works, or there would not be so much of it,” the
student continues. “Maybe something should be done about it.”
The instructor’s grin changes to a smile. “What do you think should be done?”
“I don’t know. Maybe our high schools need to teach lessons about how to recognize
false advertising.”
“It sounds as though you have a thesis statement,” encourages the instructor.
The student thinks for a moment. “So my thesis would be that high school curriculums
should include instruction about how to recognize false advertising? It’s not really about
baseball.”
“No, it’s not,” the instructor laughs. “Again: the assignment is not about baseball—it’s
about communication. Advertising is certainly a type of communication, and you’ve
drawn from a baseball experience to arrive at an arguable thesis. Moreover, your
experience of being ‘ripped off’ will enhance your paper.”
Not every struggling writer will arrive at a thesis statement as the hypothetical student
did, but the story emphasizes the value of brainstorming a topic that’s close to your heart.
When statements are either factual or too general, brainstorming can help you narrow
your topic and write a statement that is arguable.
Some educators might have good reasons for not teaching about false advertising in high
schools. Perhaps the curriculum is already too full and adding another subject would steal
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important instructional time from other subjects. Perhaps teachers would need to be
trained to recognize false advertising before they could teach students how to recognize
it. Nevertheless, the student would be making a legitimate contribution to the “world of
ideas.”
Notice that the student avoided a thesis statement such as there is a lot of false
advertising on television. Such a statement would be a statement of fact; therefore, a
paper supporting that thesis would be uninteresting. Instead, the student decided to
approach a familiar topic from a slightly new angle. By arguing that instruction about
false advertising should be included in high school curriculums, the student adds a new
twist to an old issue.
As you go further and further into your major field of study, your thesis statements will
inevitably need to be narrower. Don’t let this frighten you. As you become more of an
expert in your field, you will encounter “micro” issues that stir emotions in your soul and
evoke strong reactions.
Exercise 3
Each item below contains a general subject and a narrower subject that is derivative of it.
Write an arguable thesis statement for each group of words in the column labeled
“Narrower Topic.”
General Topic Narrower Topic Thesis
Statement
1. education distance education ?
2. communication the difference in people’s voices ?
3. work paid vacation time ?
4. dishonesty cheating in sports ?
5. community volunteerism ?
6. television reality shows ?
7. relationships fathers and sons ?
8. newspapers college newspapers ?
9. family eating together ?
10. criminal justice treatment of inmates ?
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PART 3: WRITING OR REVISING A THESIS STATEMENT TO ALIGN WITH
SUPPORTING ARGUMENTS
Every thesis statement has to have supporting arguments, usually three to five of them.
You can think of the main ideas in supporting arguments as mini-thesis statements.
Consider, for example, the following:
THESIS STATEMENT
• The cafeteria management is doing a good job.
Without supporting arguments, the statement above is simply an opinion. It is also an
opinion even with supporting arguments, but it is an opinion with an argument that
supports it.
SUPPORTING ARGUMENTS
• Cafeteria hours accommodate every student’s schedule.
• The cafeteria offers a variety of main courses at each meal.
• The cafeteria serves plenty of food that is both healthy and tasty.
• The cafeteria has been citation free for over two years.
The four statements above offer evidence that cafeteria management is doing a good job.
If this were a thesis statement for an assignment, the bulk of the paper would provide
evidence for the four supporting arguments. For example, one paragraph might “prove”
the cafeteria is open to accommodate every student’s schedule by including the earliest
times that students need in the cafeteria, the latest times, and the fact that the cafeteria is
open during those times.
Occasionally, students have thought so much about the rights or wrongs of an issue that
they write (or at least develop in their minds) closely related supporting arguments before
they write a precise thesis statement. For instance, a student might have strong feelings
about the imperfections of higher education. Having thought about those imperfections a
great deal, he or she might have well reasoned criticisms but lack a thesis. His or her
criticisms might be:
• Far too much writing is required in college.
• A college degree takes too long to earn.
• Students should not be required to take so many general education
courses.
There is nothing wrong with writing a paper from this approach; that is, writing a thesis
statement after you have developed supporting arguments. However, the thesis statement
must logically align with all supporting arguments. A thesis statement that “covers” the
supporting arguments above might read:
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• Reform in higher education should start with some of the most common
practices and assumptions.
Other times, students are passionate about a thesis statement and know exactly what they
want their supporting arguments to be. They write feverishly and develop their
supporting arguments well. Somewhere in the writing process, however, they wander
slightly from the thesis statement. Perhaps one or two supporting arguments align well
with the thesis statement, but another one goes in a different direction.
Consider the student who believes that cheating in baseball is worse than it is in other
sports. His thesis statement reads:
While cheating has become epidemic in most sports, the win-at-all-costs mentality is even
more extreme in baseball because baseball players often risk injury to themselves—not
just opposing players—so they or their teams can have an advantage.
After reading the student’s thesis statement, the instructor is intrigued. This could be a
fairly original argument.
The instructor reads on and is satisfied with the first supporting argument, which is that
batters sometimes intentionally lean in to fastballs so they will be hit by a pitch and
consequently be awarded first base. This argument certainly supports the idea that
baseball players will risk injury to cheat.
The student’s second argument also makes sense. He explains how base runners risk
personal injury when they disregard the rule of sliding straight into a base so they can
“take out” a fielder trying to make a play.
While the paper so far is not God’s gift to literature, the instructor is happy that the
student has made an original argument and has logically supported his thesis with two
supporting points.
Then the instructor reads the third supporting point:
Baseball players also take health risks when they use steroids.
While this statement is certainly true, it does not connect logically to the student’s thesis.
Remember, the student is arguing that cheating is worse in baseball. Do you see the
alignment problem? Steroid abuse is not a problem that is exclusive to baseball. Since
steroids are used by athletes in other sports as well, the student’s third supporting
argument actually weakens his overall argument.
The student had a slight glitch in his thought process. He was excited about having a
good thesis, and he ran with his idea because the first two supporting arguments came to
his mind right away. Unfortunately for the student, the instructor required three
supporting arguments for the assignment, and the third did not come as easily. To be sure,
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it is closely related to the first two, but it is not logical evidence for the thesis the student
has written. Consequently, the student is docked a few points because of his third
supporting argument.
College writers often make mistakes like the one described above. Luckily, they need not
be docked points, for a simple solution is usually only a short revision away. In the
example above, the student could have earned a better grade by keeping the same
supporting arguments (and probably adding one) and simply revising his thesis statement.
Instead of using the thesis statement
While cheating has become epidemic in most sports, the win-at-all-costs mentality is even
more extreme in baseball because baseball players often risk injury to themselves—not
just opposing players—to give themselves or their teams an advantage,
the student could have revised his thesis to read:
The win-at-all-costs mentality is so pervasive in sports that athletes often risk injury to
themselves—not just opposing players—so they or their teams can have an advantage.
With the revised thesis statement, all of the supporting arguments make sense. Of course,
the student would want to add a supporting argument or two that revolves around other
sports, since the thesis has been revised to address all athletics. The point is that it often
takes only a little thought and a little revision to make sure that thesis statements
and supporting arguments logically align.
EXERCISE 4
Write two arguable thesis statements, each with at least three supporting arguments. They
do not need to be complicated. The important thing is that your thesis and supporting
arguments logically align.
Example:
Thesis: Random drug testing should not be allowed in high schools.
Supporting Arguments:
1. It is a violation of privacy.
2. It wastes taxpayer money because most students know how to “cheat”
on the tests.
3. It instills unnecessary fear in students and consequently affects their
academic performance in a negative way.
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EXERCISE 5
Listed with the two thesis statements below are possible supporting arguments. Within
each group of possible supporting arguments, one (1) does not align logically with the
thesis. Circle each supporting argument that does not align.
1. The media should be as hard on non-players as they are on players when it comes
to cheating in baseball.
• Gamblers do a lot of damage to the game.
• Fans steal signals from opposing teams and relay them to players and coaches.
• Non-starting players also steal signals.
• Groundskeepers have been known to “fix” fields for a home-team advantage.
2. Kansas is a great place to live.
• The state has great roads and traffic is seldom congested.
• Kansas City offers many fun attractions, especially east of State Line Road.
• It has many community colleges that enhance local economies.
• Kansans have a rich history of looking out for one another.
EXERCISE 6
Revise the thesis statements in Exercise 5 above so that they “cover” all four of the
supporting arguments.
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WRITING THESIS STATEMENTS
Upon successful completion of this lesson, you should be able to:
• distinguish an arguable thesis from a statement of fact
• write an arguable thesis statement
• write a thesis statement and supporting arguments that logically align
• revise a thesis statement so that it aligns with existing supporting arguments
PART 1: ARGUABLE THESES VERSUS STATEMENTS OF FACT
In Parts 2 and 3 of this lesson, you will explore two different approaches you can use to
write a thesis statement. First, however, you must understand the difference between an
arguable thesis and a statement of fact.
Your readers—especially your professors—want to read writing that engages them.
Consequently, you must write thesis statements that are arguable, not factual.
A statement of fact is a statement that cannot be argued—at least not logically. Students
often write statements of fact instead of arguable theses when they are struggling to
embrace a topic. Statements of fact seem easy to write about because, well, they are easy
to prove. After all, they’re facts. The problem is that most students cannot write engaging
papers around statements of fact. Such theses prevent students from demonstrating
critical thinking ability and analytical skills, which professors want to see.
Statements of fact are statements of common knowledge; therefore, writing papers about
them prevents students from demonstrating important academic abilities. Consider the
statements below.
Smoking can cause health problems.
Small cars get better fuel mileage than 4×4 pickup trucks.
On average, people with college degrees earn more money in the workplace.
Foul language is common in movies.
If you were to write a paper around any of the above statements, your writing would
probably be quite dull because you would be restating facts that the general public
already knows.
In order to make your writing interesting and engaging, you should develop thesis
statements that are arguable. Sometimes you will be writing to persuade others to see
things your way. Other times you will simply be making an opinionated statement and
laying out your case. Whatever the occasion, your thesis statement should state your
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position on a debatable issue. In other words, when you write a thesis statement, you take
a stand about something.
Suppose one of the general topics listed on the previous page interests you. You could
still write about it—you might just have to change your approach so that your thesis
statement is arguable. Consider:
Statement of fact: Smoking can cause health problems.
Arguable thesis statement: The government should ban smoking altogether.
Statement of fact: Small cars get better fuel mileage than 4×4 pickup trucks.
Arguable thesis statement: The government should ban 4×4 pickup trucks except for
work-related use.
Statement of fact: On average, people with college degrees earn more money in the
workplace.
Arguable thesis statement: A college degree should not be required for the _____
profession.
Statement of fact: Foul language is common in movies.
Arguable thesis statement: The amount of foul language in movies is disproportionate to
the amount of foul language in real life.
Any given individual might agree or disagree with some or all of the revised statements
above, and the evidence used to support or challenge the statements would be different
from writer to writer. The point is that a writer who supported or challenged one of these
theses would have to think in order to make his or her case. With a statement of fact, a
writer simply puts on paper what has already been established by other people. An
arguable thesis, on the other hand, requires a writer to think about which supporting
arguments best challenge the other side of the issue. It is this type of thinking that
resonates with your professors.
Exercise 1
The following exercise contains hypothetical thesis statements. On the blank line beside
each statement, write “A” if the statement is arguable or “F” if the statement is a
statement of fact.
_______1. The amount of financial aid available to students should be proportionate to
the earning potential of the career fields for which their majors prepare them.
_______2. Tom Hanks should have won the Best-Actor award for his performance in
Castaway.
_______3. Frank Sinatra was loved and admired by many people.
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_______4. The United States contains citizens of many different ethnicities.
_______5. Sterling College should make coffee available to students in every building.
_______6. Driving under the influence of alcohol is dangerous.
_______7. Penalties for drinking and driving should be more severe.
_______8. Television networks air a lot of reality shows nowadays.
_______9. The Harry Potter movies are better than the Indiana Jones movies.
_______10. Steroid abuse can lead to serious health problems.
Exercise 2
Write three (3) to five (5) arguable thesis statements.
PART 2: WRITING AN ARGUABLE AND NARROW THESIS STATEMENT
AROUND AN ISSUE THAT EXCITES YOU
Because you’re a living, breathing human being, you have strong feelings about some
things. Maybe you’ve played a sport all of your life, had many good experiences within
that sport, and consequently care deeply about it. Or perhaps you’ve lost a loved one to a
rare disease and feel strongly that public awareness about that disease should increase.
Because God gave us emotions, we care about things.
Often, especially in writing courses, students are told to “write about what they know.”
When assignments are relatively open ended and students are permitted to write thesis
statements that are not merely restatements of essay questions, their knowledge and
passion about topics close to their heart can enhance their writing. However, some
students have a difficult time developing a good thesis statement from a general topic or
issue, even if they care a great deal about the subject.
Consider, for example, a student who is asked to write a paper about anything having to
do with communication. The student is attending college on a baseball scholarship, and
he would love to connect baseball to the subject of communication so that he does not die
of boredom while working on the assignment. However, the only association he can
make between the two subjects has to do with the non-verbal signals that coaches give to
their players. On the day his thesis is due, the student submits the following sentence to
his instructor:
Hand signals are an important part of baseball.
Perhaps the instructor should use more tact, but in the margin beside the student’s thesis
statement, she writes, “No duh! This is a statement of fact. Try again.”
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When the instructor returns the paper a couple of days later, she sits down with the
student and helps him think through the assignment. After helping him see why his
current thesis is a statement of fact, she then helps him brainstorm some ideas. She begins
by having him write “communication and baseball” in a circle on a blank sheet of paper.
Then, sensitive to the student’s desire to connect the assignment topic to his favorite
sport, she asks, “What other types of communication are associated with baseball?”
The student thinks for a moment—but not too long, for he knows baseball well.
“Catchers flash signals to pitchers so they can agree on what type of pitch will be
thrown.”
“Okay,” replies the instructor. “Write ‘catchers’ signals’ in a circle and connect it to the
first.”
Catchers’
signals
Communication
and baseball
“What else?” asks the instructor.
“Well, infielders sometimes communicate with each other with secret hand signals.”
“Okay” says the instructor. “Write that in another circle. But you’re still thinking about
the players. How else does communication relate to baseball?”
“Announcers communicate,” says the student.
“Now you’re thinking. Write that down, too.”
Communication
and baseball
Announcers
Infielders’
signals Catchers’
signals
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After a few moments of silence, the student says, “I’m thinking of something that has a
definite connection to communication but only a lose connection to baseball.”
”That’s okay,” the instructor replies. “We’re brainstorming. And remember: the
assignment topic is communication—not baseball. You’re thinking about baseball
because you want to make the assignment interesting for yourself. What’s your idea?”
“Earlier in the summer I saw a commercial for a piece of equipment that I thought would
help make me a better player. I saved my money and bought it, but it was the biggest rip-
off I’ve ever seen. The commercial was completely misleading. I was thinking of writing
‘baseball product advertising’ in another circle.”
“Now you’re really thinking,” says the instructor.
The student is not even finished writing the words when he has an even more developed
idea. “You know, since I bought that piece of equipment, I’ve often wondered about how
many people are misled by false advertising.”
The instructor grins, sensing that the student is getting closer to a good thesis statement.
“I mean, false advertising obviously works, or there would not be so much of it,” the
student continues. “Maybe something should be done about it.”
The instructor’s grin changes to a smile. “What do you think should be done?”
“I don’t know. Maybe our high schools need to teach lessons about how to recognize
false advertising.”
“It sounds as though you have a thesis statement,” encourages the instructor.
The student thinks for a moment. “So my thesis would be that high school curriculums
should include instruction about how to recognize false advertising? It’s not really about
baseball.”
“No, it’s not,” the instructor laughs. “Again: the assignment is not about baseball—it’s
about communication. Advertising is certainly a type of communication, and you’ve
drawn from a baseball experience to arrive at an arguable thesis. Moreover, your
experience of being ‘ripped off’ will enhance your paper.”
Not every struggling writer will arrive at a thesis statement as the hypothetical student
did, but the story emphasizes the value of brainstorming a topic that’s close to your heart.
When statements are either factual or too general, brainstorming can help you narrow
your topic and write a statement that is arguable.
Some educators might have good reasons for not teaching about false advertising in high
schools. Perhaps the curriculum is already too full and adding another subject would steal
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important instructional time from other subjects. Perhaps teachers would need to be
trained to recognize false advertising before they could teach students how to recognize
it. Nevertheless, the student would be making a legitimate contribution to the “world of
ideas.”
Notice that the student avoided a thesis statement such as there is a lot of false
advertising on television. Such a statement would be a statement of fact; therefore, a
paper supporting that thesis would be uninteresting. Instead, the student decided to
approach a familiar topic from a slightly new angle. By arguing that instruction about
false advertising should be included in high school curriculums, the student adds a new
twist to an old issue.
As you go further and further into your major field of study, your thesis statements will
inevitably need to be narrower. Don’t let this frighten you. As you become more of an
expert in your field, you will encounter “micro” issues that stir emotions in your soul and
evoke strong reactions.
Exercise 3
Each item below contains a general subject and a narrower subject that is derivative of it.
Write an arguable thesis statement for each group of words in the column labeled
“Narrower Topic.”
General Topic Narrower Topic Thesis
Statement
1. education distance education ?
2. communication the difference in people’s voices ?
3. work paid vacation time ?
4. dishonesty cheating in sports ?
5. community volunteerism ?
6. television reality shows ?
7. relationships fathers and sons ?
8. newspapers college newspapers ?
9. family eating together ?
10. criminal justice treatment of inmates ?
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PART 3: WRITING OR REVISING A THESIS STATEMENT TO ALIGN WITH
SUPPORTING ARGUMENTS
Every thesis statement has to have supporting arguments, usually three to five of them.
You can think of the main ideas in supporting arguments as mini-thesis statements.
Consider, for example, the following:
THESIS STATEMENT
• The cafeteria management is doing a good job.
Without supporting arguments, the statement above is simply an opinion. It is also an
opinion even with supporting arguments, but it is an opinion with an argument that
supports it.
SUPPORTING ARGUMENTS
• Cafeteria hours accommodate every student’s schedule.
• The cafeteria offers a variety of main courses at each meal.
• The cafeteria serves plenty of food that is both healthy and tasty.
• The cafeteria has been citation free for over two years.
The four statements above offer evidence that cafeteria management is doing a good job.
If this were a thesis statement for an assignment, the bulk of the paper would provide
evidence for the four supporting arguments. For example, one paragraph might “prove”
the cafeteria is open to accommodate every student’s schedule by including the earliest
times that students need in the cafeteria, the latest times, and the fact that the cafeteria is
open during those times.
Occasionally, students have thought so much about the rights or wrongs of an issue that
they write (or at least develop in their minds) closely related supporting arguments before
they write a precise thesis statement. For instance, a student might have strong feelings
about the imperfections of higher education. Having thought about those imperfections a
great deal, he or she might have well reasoned criticisms but lack a thesis. His or her
criticisms might be:
• Far too much writing is required in college.
• A college degree takes too long to earn.
• Students should not be required to take so many general education
courses.
There is nothing wrong with writing a paper from this approach; that is, writing a thesis
statement after you have developed supporting arguments. However, the thesis statement
must logically align with all supporting arguments. A thesis statement that “covers” the
supporting arguments above might read:
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• Reform in higher education should start with some of the most common
practices and assumptions.
Other times, students are passionate about a thesis statement and know exactly what they
want their supporting arguments to be. They write feverishly and develop their
supporting arguments well. Somewhere in the writing process, however, they wander
slightly from the thesis statement. Perhaps one or two supporting arguments align well
with the thesis statement, but another one goes in a different direction.
Consider the student who believes that cheating in baseball is worse than it is in other
sports. His thesis statement reads:
While cheating has become epidemic in most sports, the win-at-all-costs mentality is even
more extreme in baseball because baseball players often risk injury to themselves—not
just opposing players—so they or their teams can have an advantage.
After reading the student’s thesis statement, the instructor is intrigued. This could be a
fairly original argument.
The instructor reads on and is satisfied with the first supporting argument, which is that
batters sometimes intentionally lean in to fastballs so they will be hit by a pitch and
consequently be awarded first base. This argument certainly supports the idea that
baseball players will risk injury to cheat.
The student’s second argument also makes sense. He explains how base runners risk
personal injury when they disregard the rule of sliding straight into a base so they can
“take out” a fielder trying to make a play.
While the paper so far is not God’s gift to literature, the instructor is happy that the
student has made an original argument and has logically supported his thesis with two
supporting points.
Then the instructor reads the third supporting point:
Baseball players also take health risks when they use steroids.
While this statement is certainly true, it does not connect logically to the student’s thesis.
Remember, the student is arguing that cheating is worse in baseball. Do you see the
alignment problem? Steroid abuse is not a problem that is exclusive to baseball. Since
steroids are used by athletes in other sports as well, the student’s third supporting
argument actually weakens his overall argument.
The student had a slight glitch in his thought process. He was excited about having a
good thesis, and he ran with his idea because the first two supporting arguments came to
his mind right away. Unfortunately for the student, the instructor required three
supporting arguments for the assignment, and the third did not come as easily. To be sure,
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it is closely related to the first two, but it is not logical evidence for the thesis the student
has written. Consequently, the student is docked a few points because of his third
supporting argument.
College writers often make mistakes like the one described above. Luckily, they need not
be docked points, for a simple solution is usually only a short revision away. In the
example above, the student could have earned a better grade by keeping the same
supporting arguments (and probably adding one) and simply revising his thesis statement.
Instead of using the thesis statement
While cheating has become epidemic in most sports, the win-at-all-costs mentality is even
more extreme in baseball because baseball players often risk injury to themselves—not
just opposing players—to give themselves or their teams an advantage,
the student could have revised his thesis to read:
The win-at-all-costs mentality is so pervasive in sports that athletes often risk injury to
themselves—not just opposing players—so they or their teams can have an advantage.
With the revised thesis statement, all of the supporting arguments make sense. Of course,
the student would want to add a supporting argument or two that revolves around other
sports, since the thesis has been revised to address all athletics. The point is that it often
takes only a little thought and a little revision to make sure that thesis statements
and supporting arguments logically align.
EXERCISE 4
Write two arguable thesis statements, each with at least three supporting arguments. They
do not need to be complicated. The important thing is that your thesis and supporting
arguments logically align.
Example:
Thesis: Random drug testing should not be allowed in high schools.
Supporting Arguments:
1. It is a violation of privacy.
2. It wastes taxpayer money because most students know how to “cheat”
on the tests.
3. It instills unnecessary fear in students and consequently affects their
academic performance in a negative way.
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EXERCISE 5
Listed with the two thesis statements below are possible supporting arguments. Within
each group of possible supporting arguments, one (1) does not align logically with the
thesis. Circle each supporting argument that does not align.
1. The media should be as hard on non-players as they are on players when it comes
to cheating in baseball.
• Gamblers do a lot of damage to the game.
• Fans steal signals from opposing teams and relay them to players and coaches.
• Non-starting players also steal signals.
• Groundskeepers have been known to “fix” fields for a home-team advantage.
2. Kansas is a great place to live.
• The state has great roads and traffic is seldom congested.
• Kansas City offers many fun attractions, especially east of State Line Road.
• It has many community colleges that enhance local economies.
• Kansans have a rich history of looking out for one another.
EXERCISE 6
Revise the thesis statements in Exercise 5 above so that they “cover” all four of the
supporting arguments.